孙远--GMAT作文--讲义（四）d

3. Attributive Clause

Example 1:

  Change:  It is a truth that is universally acknowledged that a single man in possession of a good fortune must be in want of a wife.

    To:  It is a truth that is universally acknowledged that a single man in possession of a good fortune must be in want of a wife.

  Example 2:

  Change:  Only a person who is oblivious¹ to the facts of modern life would doubt the need of vocational education today.

    To:  Only a person oblivious to the facts of modern life would doubt the need of vocational education today.

4. Pronouns

1) Change:  He wanted his teachers to think he was above average, as he could have been if he had used it to advantage.

    To:  He wanted his teachers to think he was above average, as he could have been if he had used his ability to advantage.

2) Change:  My sister is a biology teacher, it is a profession I know nothing about.

    To:  My sister is a biology teacher, but the teaching of biology is a profession I know nothing about.

3)  Change:  We should have prepared for our examination earlier. It is too late to do it now.

     To:  We should have prepared for our examination earlier. It is too late now.

5. Punctuation² Marks

冒

1)ost sports programs, despite their excesses, manage to promote the old virtues³ such as self-confidence, personal responsibility, teamwork, persistence⁴, the ability to win and lose with grace.

2) For Omar Khayyam, a Persian Poet, three things are necessary for a paradise on earth: a loaf of bread, a jug⁵ of wine, and one’s beloved.

破折号:

1) What he lacked in intelligence--and he lacked a good deal--he made up for in physical strength.

2) In many parts of the developing world, life’s basic necessities--food, clothing, shelter, and taxes--gobble up people’s earnings⁶.

3) Every afternoon, Larry has two hours of track practice. He has followed the same routine five days a week since he was seven--all in hopes of winning a college athletic⁷ scholarship and eventually a shot at the Olympics.