3月29日雅思作文原创范文
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Topic:
Some people think that it is the responsibility of government to ensure that people have healthy lifestyle.
Others think people should be free to make their lifestyle decisions. Discuss the both viewpoints and
give your own opinion. (政府决策类)

写作结构思路:
以下是我构思的每一段的思路(因为当时是写给自己看的,不知道大家看不看的懂),表*的说明是必须要写的部分。

开头段:

Introduce the topic
*Viewpont1 (Paraphrase)
*Viewpoint2 (Paraphrase)

主干部分 (对称结构):

Transitional Sentence
*Merit of Viewpint1 (Help young people back to track)
*Problem of Viewpoint1 (Hard to execute/can't be forced)

Transitional Sentence
*Merit of Viewpoint2 (Symbol of Freedom)
*Problem of Viewpint2 (Self-control)

结尾:

*Indicate both viewpoints have problems
*Come to conclude your own opinion (Guide instead of forcing)

范文正文:

Some people hold that government should hold the full responsibility to make sure that people lead their lives in a healthy way. Others, however, argue that it is only the people themselves that can decide which lifestyle they pursue. (39 words)

On one hand, the proposal that government should ensure people to choose a healthy lifestyle sounds reasonable to a certain extent. In fact, quite a number of people, especially young people, are living in unhealthy lifestyles. For example, a lot of teenagers are staying up late for parties or PC games, which potentially do harm to their physical and mental health. If government do something, for instance, banning all pubs and internet cafes in cities, it is likely that those people will have to discard their obsession1 and revert2 to a normal lifestyle. (93 words) Nevertheless, it has to be pointed3 out that although the practice seems to be sounding, it is unlikely to solve the problem thoroughly4. For example, even if all the pubs and internet cafes are officially banned, chances are that those young people will still indulge themselves in unhealthy lifestyles playing PC games or throwing parties till midnight at home. (58 words)

On the other hand, those who call for the freedom to choose their own lifestyles also have a point. Indeed, it would be a sign indicating that people’s freedom are fully5 recognized and respected if a government leaves the decision to people themselves. (43 words) However, it should not be ignored that some young people who do lack self-control are possibly to be fully obsessed6 with self-indulgent lifestyles if the government virtually does nothing about it. (31 words)

From the above analysis, it could be noted7 that either viewpoint has obvious problems. In my opinion, the government needs to play a role in guiding people to live in a healthy way but it is never possible for the government to literally8 “ensure” that by taking compulsory9 measures. (49 words)

(303 words altogether)

 



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1 obsession eIdxt     
n.困扰,无法摆脱的思想(或情感)
参考例句:
  • I was suffering from obsession that my career would be ended.那时的我陷入了我的事业有可能就此终止的困扰当中。
  • She would try to forget her obsession with Christopher.她会努力忘记对克里斯托弗的迷恋。
2 revert OBwzV     
v.恢复,复归,回到
参考例句:
  • Let us revert to the earlier part of the chapter.让我们回到本章的前面部分。
  • Shall we revert to the matter we talked about yesterday?我们接着昨天谈过的问题谈,好吗?
3 pointed Il8zB4     
adj.尖的,直截了当的
参考例句:
  • He gave me a very sharp pointed pencil.他给我一支削得非常尖的铅笔。
  • She wished to show Mrs.John Dashwood by this pointed invitation to her brother.她想通过对达茨伍德夫人提出直截了当的邀请向她的哥哥表示出来。
4 thoroughly sgmz0J     
adv.完全地,彻底地,十足地
参考例句:
  • The soil must be thoroughly turned over before planting.一定要先把土地深翻一遍再下种。
  • The soldiers have been thoroughly instructed in the care of their weapons.士兵们都系统地接受过保护武器的训练。
5 fully Gfuzd     
adv.完全地,全部地,彻底地;充分地
参考例句:
  • The doctor asked me to breathe in,then to breathe out fully.医生让我先吸气,然后全部呼出。
  • They soon became fully integrated into the local community.他们很快就完全融入了当地人的圈子。
6 obsessed 66a4be1417f7cf074208a6d81c8f3384     
adj.心神不宁的,鬼迷心窍的,沉迷的
参考例句:
  • He's obsessed by computers. 他迷上了电脑。
  • The fear of death obsessed him throughout his old life. 他晚年一直受着死亡恐惧的困扰。
7 noted 5n4zXc     
adj.著名的,知名的
参考例句:
  • The local hotel is noted for its good table.当地的那家酒店以餐食精美而著称。
  • Jim is noted for arriving late for work.吉姆上班迟到出了名。
8 literally 28Wzv     
adv.照字面意义,逐字地;确实
参考例句:
  • He translated the passage literally.他逐字逐句地翻译这段文字。
  • Sometimes she would not sit down till she was literally faint.有时候,她不走到真正要昏厥了,决不肯坐下来。
9 compulsory 5pVzu     
n.强制的,必修的;规定的,义务的
参考例句:
  • Is English a compulsory subject?英语是必修课吗?
  • Compulsory schooling ends at sixteen.义务教育至16岁为止。
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