我对自己习作的点评
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我的习作,期待大家的点评。

 

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"Colleges and universities should offer more courses on popular music,
film, advertising1 and television because contemporary culture has much
greater relevance2 for students than do arts and literature of the past."


Essay

Few people, if asked, would deny that colleges and universities should
offer art and literature courses to students. Yet when it comes to whether
other courses like popular music, film, advertising and television should
make up a greater portion in the curriculum, there is hardly a consensus3.
I, however, hold the opinion that the classical classes should always be
most important.

Before trapping myself into needless arguments, let me first make an
analyis of what role our higher education plays in this modern society.
Universities, different from the career training courses, are supposed to
teach great values to people, especially young people, so that these values
will take roots in their minds and mode them into truely gentle and kind
men and women. In a sense, what universities preach are "useless"
knowledge, in the light of practical uses. Here, I by no means refer to the
word "useless" in a negative way, rather, I believe it is just the so-
called useless knowledge that makes human beings true human beings. It
teaches us to cherish kindness and tolerance4 to othes; to take care of all
kind of people, be them our parents or strangers; to seek ultimate truth of
the mystery of nature,and so on. In a word, arts and literature courses of
the past aim to build men and women into liberal and kind persons.They are
looing further than their own merits. They are possibly commercial leaders,
policy makers5, NGO founders6; But most importantly, people trained in this
way will keep all people's welfare in their minds rather than thier own.

On the contrary, career training only focuses on survival skills. People
can turn out to be very efficient or handy after they have taken up these
courses. Unfortunately, there is little hope that they can learn real
values to be a man, not a manager or an engineer .

In the similar way, offering more courses on popular music, film,
advertising and television will have the same effect. Admittedly, they are
more relevant with our daily life and are prone7 to attract more attention
from the mass, I still cast doubt on the "relevant values". A true artists
should not act by catering8 to his audience. He or she is destined9 to say
what he or she wants to say, even if none will echo it. Time is their
belief. They are working for Time and audience thousands of years later.
Relevance of reality will extort10 the seriousnes of their works to a large
extent .

I do not look down upon practical entertainment. But I believe there are
already plenty of popular music, funny films, attractive advertisments and
soap series. They are produced more in a manufacturing way rather than a
art-creating way. Music and film are more and more taking on a look of
products in this post-modern society, which reaveals a sharp contrast with
what they used to be.

Colleges and universities should resume the responsibility to guard our
classical values and the "useless" knowledge. While career training courses
are accomplishing their aim of making attractive things, higher education
should stick to their tough goal for they are the paradise for human's
thoughts.

In summary, I strongly suggest college and universities remain classical
arts and literature courses and leave those relevant with contemporary
culture to other schools.

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我的点评和感想如下:
1。由于审题太匆忙,而且这个题目与我喜欢的话题比较相近,我竟然偏题了。把arts and
literature of the past理解成了以前的大学生所学的art and literature,也就是古典
艺术和文学。所以我文中出现的都是classical云云。还好这样的理解,也勉强说得通。所以
不算太偏题。但是很明显,我和范文的立意走的是不同的路。范文强调的是古代的知识和现
代的知识对现代人的影响,而我强调的是,大学应该保留“无用的知识”以维系人类之所以
为人的尊严,这是大学和一般的职业教育区别所在。

2。范文比较balanced,既说现当代的好,也说以前的好,最后还总结学生既应学习现代的,
也应该学习古代的。而我的作文里,虽然也提到两方面,但是对古代的情有独钟,花了很多
笔墨。另外,我还提到了职业教育。不知道这样是不是扯得太远。相比之下,我的倾向性很
强。(当然,反对世俗的文化教育,是我一贯的态度。)

3。在旁征博引方面,我显然逊色多了。其实我今天写的太急,忘了应该举例(我一碰到喜欢
的话题就滔滔不绝的说理,只有写不出大道理时才会想起举例子。其实这样真是扬短避长,
因为毕竟我们要用英文说理,并不是很得心应手的)。但是范文的例子,虽然我可以为之击
掌,却觉得用不上。即使那些例子我都知道,也不知道相应的英文怎么说。尤其是人名地
名。所以我觉得这方面嘉文博译有些疏忽了。他光顾着把文章写的漂亮,忘了对普通学生的
借鉴性。


4。我觉得我在句式变化方面做的还好,但是动词的生动性显然不如范文,这也是我要努力的
地方。

我暂时想到的就这么多,很希望各位给我一点意见,多多批评指正!



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1 advertising 1zjzi3     
n.广告业;广告活动 a.广告的;广告业务的
参考例句:
  • Can you give me any advice on getting into advertising? 你能指点我如何涉足广告业吗?
  • The advertising campaign is aimed primarily at young people. 这个广告宣传运动主要是针对年轻人的。
2 relevance gVAxg     
n.中肯,适当,关联,相关性
参考例句:
  • Politicians' private lives have no relevance to their public roles.政治家的私生活与他们的公众角色不相关。
  • Her ideas have lost all relevance to the modern world.她的想法与现代社会完全脱节。
3 consensus epMzA     
n.(意见等的)一致,一致同意,共识
参考例句:
  • Can we reach a consensus on this issue?我们能在这个问题上取得一致意见吗?
  • What is the consensus of opinion at the afternoon meeting?下午会议上一致的意见是什么?
4 tolerance Lnswz     
n.宽容;容忍,忍受;耐药力;公差
参考例句:
  • Tolerance is one of his strengths.宽容是他的一个优点。
  • Human beings have limited tolerance of noise.人类对噪音的忍耐力有限。
5 makers 22a4efff03ac42c1785d09a48313d352     
n.制造者,制造商(maker的复数形式)
参考例句:
  • The makers of the product assured us that there had been no sacrifice of quality. 这一产品的制造商向我们保证说他们没有牺牲质量。
  • The makers are about to launch out a new product. 制造商们马上要生产一种新产品。 来自《简明英汉词典》
6 founders 863257b2606659efe292a0bf3114782c     
n.创始人( founder的名词复数 )
参考例句:
  • He was one of the founders of the university's medical faculty. 他是该大学医学院的创建人之一。 来自辞典例句
  • The founders of our religion made this a cornerstone of morality. 我们宗教的创始人把这看作是道德的基石。 来自辞典例句
7 prone 50bzu     
adj.(to)易于…的,很可能…的;俯卧的
参考例句:
  • Some people are prone to jump to hasty conclusions.有些人往往作出轻率的结论。
  • He is prone to lose his temper when people disagree with him.人家一不同意他的意见,他就发脾气。
8 catering WwtztU     
n. 给养
参考例句:
  • Most of our work now involves catering for weddings. 我们现在的工作多半是承办婚宴。
  • Who did the catering for your son's wedding? 你儿子的婚宴是由谁承办的?
9 destined Dunznz     
adj.命中注定的;(for)以…为目的地的
参考例句:
  • It was destined that they would marry.他们结婚是缘分。
  • The shipment is destined for America.这批货物将运往美国。
10 extort KP1zQ     
v.勒索,敲诈,强要
参考例句:
  • The blackmailer tried to extort a large sum of money from him.勒索者企图向他勒索一大笔钱。
  • They absolutely must not harm the people or extort money from them.严格禁止坑害勒索群众。
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