1. Parents always think that children will get a good job and earn a lot of money.
　　改进: Parents always expect their children to get a good job and earn a lot of money.
　　2. If a student only cares about money, will lead to be unhappy all his life.
　　改进: If a student only cares about money, he will be misled¹ and will be unhappy all his life.
　　3. One purpose of education is to study the way in which he studies later.
　　改进: One purpose of education is to learn to learn.
　　4. Many parents arrange their children go to learn piano.
　　改进: Many parents send their children to piano classes.
　　5. When I want to absorb somebody else’s opinion, I will study with others.
　　改进: When I need second opinion, I will study with others.
　　6. Eating outside has the most advantage that we can go at any time when we finish eating without doing any washing.
　　改进: The best part of eating out is that we can leave everything behind after meal.
　　7. Smoking can help you relax your mind.
　　改进: Cigarettes can help you relax.
　　8. What’s about nonsmokers?
　　改进: What about nonsmokers?
　　9. Why not to be a non-smoker?
　　改进: Why not be a non-smoker?
　　10. Everyone will have many friends in his life.
　　改进: Everyone has friends in his life.
　　11. I am not good at maths, but English
　　改进: I am good not at mathematics but at English/ My strength is not mathematics but English.
　　12. Who is the proper person to make up his minds about children’s leisure² time?
　　改进: Who is the proper person to plan children’s leisure time?
　　13.It is children who clear about their interests.
　　改进: It is children who are clear about their own interests.
　　14. I agree the latter idea.
　　改进: I agree with the latter idea.
　　15. Many people dissatisfy³ with the status quo.
　　改进: Many people are dissatisfied⁴ with the status quo.
　　16. So I feel breathe more comfortably now.
　　改进: So I feel more comfortable now when I breathe.
　　17. People should learn knowledge no matter how old they are.
　　改进：People should learn no matter how old they are/ People are never too old to learn.
　　18. No one knows all the things.
　　改进: No one knows everything.
　　19. I want to live in a quiet place to admire peaceful life.
　　改进: I want to live in a quiet place to enjoy peaceful life.
　　20. Each form ofshavingsfriends has its advantages.
　　改进: Each way of choosing friends has its advantages.
　　21. I was admitted to a key university for which few dared to sign up.
　　改进: I was admitted to a key university to which few dared to apply.
　　22. Luckily, he recognized an American professor.
　　改进: Luckily, he knew an American professor.
　　23. They will learn the bad habits.
　　改进: They will develop bad habits.
　　24. In this continued process, people make progress.
　　改进: In this cycle, people make progress.
　　25. Lastly, higher education is equal to higher salary.
　　改进: Lastly, higher education means higher salary.
　　26. By making friends who are different from ourselves, we can make up for deficiency⁵.
　　改进: By making friends who are different from ourselves, we can make up for our shortcomings.
　　27. A wrong decision will bring even worse fact.
　　改进: A wrong decision will bring even worse result.
　　28. You spend all your life to fulfill⁶ your willing.
　　改进: You devote all your life to the fulfillment of your dream.
　　29. Children should be taught disciplines insgroupsto avoid unnecessary lost.
　　改进: Children should be taught discipline insgroupsto avoid unnecessary loss.
　　30. I felt alone.
　　改进: I felt lonely.

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